Thank you for the constructive criticism! It's very much appreciated!
November 25th, 2011 at 02:06am
it's great, i'm getting hooked and wanna read more. but can you please explain to me the "this time away and away from me" sentence, it doesn't make sense.
there were lots of run on sentences, see if you can differ the need of periods and comas. and i would like to see an example of what the main character writes, and perhaps of her personal life away from school. the comparison of the different scenarios is a great way for the reader to get a good understanding of the characters probable reaction to certain events. i would like to see how your work takes a turn, please keep writing.