Favorite line, right here: "Just sleep," she whispered and kissed each of my knuckles. I nodded, and the only thing keeping me from sleep was the feeling her lips on my hand.
That makes me smile and wish I had someone to kiss my knuckles and fall asleep next to me xDD
I really liked the way Finch/Seth and Kinsley talk to each other. I like how you explained her history and why she didn't react really dramatically to the rape and stuff. Great job! update soon? I look forward to it!