The First Evil - Comments

Finally an update! It's been way too long girly. I really loved this chapter. I can't wait to see what she does to Gates in order to escape. I have a feeling it has to do with seduction and possibly sex since he is lust after all right? lol idk. I really really really really really hope you update this soon. I have't forgotten about this story

Oh my gosh! It has been too long since I've seen this gem!

holeee shiiiit I totally forgot about this story

I love this story, it is something else! :D You're a wonderful writer

I love this! Update right now!

Awesome more more more

First off, I hate to start off with the negative, but the disclaimer is really not necessary. This site does not require them, and it's safe for me to assume as a reader that because this is labeled as fanfiction, you don't own any charaters I recognize.

Moving onto the actual content of the story, because this is a comment swap, I'm only reading and commenting on the first chapter. I have to admit that I was completely lost, probably because I'm not familiar with the fandom or the prequel to this, and I felt like the prologue just introduced waaaay too many characters in the short span of one chapter that it was impossbile for me to keep them straight, and while I appreciate that you actually put in the effort to include the backstory, it read as a bit of an info dump, so that made it difficult to really get into the story.

That being said, I did enjoy the concept of the story. It definitely reminded me of a mixture of "Paradise Lost" and Chuck Palahniuk's novel Damned. It's obvious that you put a lot of thought and effort into creating this universe and the respective characters, so it was an entertaining read.

Jeez, that was fast.

I wonder how she's going to keep Vengeance away from the throne, because he is conceited and greedy enough to want it for himself. That'll be a hard mission.

Amazing update :)
Wow it seems that Gates is making Christ doubt what Lilith's true intentions are and now he has been captured.

I am loving the addition of Pandora's Box. It makes everything so much more chaotic.

Great update :)

Wonder how many guys will end up trusting her enough so that she can take down Plague. This shall be interesting. I'm also very curious where the evil 'went' as you implied.

This story is literally like my new obsession. I'm always like, "What is Lilith going to do next, and whats going to happen?" I absolutely love it :)

Amazing update :)
So Plague knew all along that Lilith was back..I wonder what he's planning now to stop her??

Oh that was beautiful.

It must be odd for her to see what she use to be like.

Amazing update :)
Wow she sure punished Syn good since he's the one who took her soul to become the Prince of Lust.
Now Syn knows not to mess with Lilith.
I cant' wait for the next one

Is it Syn?? That was what I was betting when mystery man first appeared. Holy shit!

syynn... anyway can't wait for another update love it

She ran into Syn :O
Amazing update :)

Wow I wouldn't of guessed that Johhny gave up his sin. I miss Lilith's other side but her soft side fits too, we actually get to see that she has a heart. Great job on the new chapter, I love that you're updating more frequent. Keep up the great work!!