The Make Up - Comments

I like it so far. Update soon!

I'm sorry it took me so long to comment.
Best of luck with this story. I'm sorry to say that I probably won't be able to read it; lately, I haven't been getting on here as much and it's been kind of a hassle to keep up with everything. I definitely don't want to do this, because obviously if I wasn't interested in this story, I wouldn't have ever started reading it in the first place, but yeah... I have to prioritize a little bit until I come to the point where I have time to read as many stories as I used to.
Sometime in the future I hope to find this again and read what you have.
I hope you can understand where I'm coming from. I apologize if you don't hear from me for a while or if I never get around to commenting again. :/
Best of luck with it, though; I'm sure it will be amazing.
Your reader,
Jenna a.k.a. Nanook

My story editor senses are tingling. Just like what the phantom pointed out, isn't Beck a character from Victorious? If so, this should be changed into a fanfic or else you'll be breaking the rules.

The summary is beautiful. It intrigued and made me curious so that's a brownie point. I can't really say much for the characters since it's just one chapter. I have to compare the first and the second, you know? Anyways, even with one chapter, it's a good read. You explained carefully what was happening although I thought Ally was somewhat inconsiderate. She threw a party without thinking of the consequence. There are minimal mistakes that I found - mostly on the dialogue. The periods should be commas, I believe. I may be wrong though.

Dum Dum:

Your writing is phenomenal. It's beautiful and well written and just stellar. I love it. Ally is a great character. I agree with the great monroe, Beck kind of ticked me off even though I can kind of relate because of the whole working on something for that long. It's good and I love this :)

The summary intrigued me, I must say. However, isn’t Beck a character from Victorious? So, wouldn’t this be a fanfic? Or did you just use his face and name but not his character?
I kind of disliked Beck a little, and I don’t know if you meant for that to be the case or not. I just felts he was way over the top. The situation seems a bit unreal because I feel that a ruined art project is enough to make you upset with them for a while but not too seriously. I mean, I’d be pretty pissed if my work was ruined but I’d cool off after maybe a day or two. That’s really the only concrit I have because I thought the story was amazingly written. Good luck and happy Halloween!

Aw, this story is going to be so heartbreaking. Everyone has had this moment with a good friend once. I know I did. x.x

I can't wait to see where this goes.

When I saw Avan Jogia, I was like "OMG that sexy guy from Victorious!" and immediately came to read your story. And I love it so far. Can't wait for more.

Aw... the troubles of moving on. Or the pain, I guess. :/
Sounds interesting.
Can't wait for this one to start either!
Definitely... subscribed!
And aha, sorry for the random comments. I just randomly stumbled across your profile. :P