Anyways... I like this story and find it interesting. I think you should read it over and edit it a bit but there are no serious errors. I found the second chapter, while interesting, a bit repetitive and boring, it didn't seem like a "real" conversation, if that makes any sense. I have the same problem :P though I am subbing as i find this story interesting and i can't wait to see where you go with it or if you'll finish it in time :3
Anyways... I like this story and find it interesting. I think you should read it over and edit it a bit but there are no serious errors. I found the second chapter, while interesting, a bit repetitive and boring, it didn't seem like a "real" conversation, if that makes any sense. I have the same problem :P
though I am subbing as i find this story interesting and i can't wait to see where you go with it or if you'll finish it in time :3