December 31st, 2011 at 05:18am
All at Once - Comments
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I just read the first chapter. You said that you don't need to read the first one to understand this book, but I think you do. This is good writing, but its confusing. Like the random tidbits of kidnapping etc. Its hard to make out his relationship to Emily the cook and so on. I understand prolonging it a bit, but its just confusing so far. I've read before about the first draft of a book is written for the author, the second draft is for the reader. But it sounds like an interesting story so far.December 31st, 2011 at 02:27am
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I love it. Please update soon!!!December 31st, 2011 at 02:05am
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It's nice that it shows how much Zane cares. It's proof to Emily that he isn't the bad guy.December 15th, 2011 at 02:46am
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Just the beginning for all of the running. Oh the joy hahaDecember 5th, 2011 at 12:40am
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I love it!
My thanksgiving: well they were pretty intersting haha How was yours?November 28th, 2011 at 01:15am -
I love it. It shows more depth. Keep it up!November 14th, 2011 at 02:48pm
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I love the idea of letting us know what he is thinking. It makes sense. I love how you said "Emily is the Bonnie to my Clyde. The Juliet to my Romeo." I love it, not quite sure why but I do. :)
Great starter!November 4th, 2011 at 02:39am -
This was a good idea, letting us know what's going on in his mind.November 3rd, 2011 at 08:38pm
2. Great!! I love it!
3. I have before, and I'll check some more out again.