Edge of Desire - Comments

is kendall gunna kill himself :((((((((((

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Finally another interesting story
I subscribed to this <3
The layout is cute btw ^_^ can't wait until I'm more awake to read more

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I just finished reading your story! It was a first for me, because even though I had heard about BTR before, I knew nothing about the members, and I kinda had to google them XD

I have mixed feelings about Kendall and Jess. I don't know how I feel about them because they're not the kind of characters you can describe as just good or bad. That's what I liked the most about your story. The characters are just...people.

I know some readers consider this to go a little fast, but personally speaking, I enjoyed the pace. Sometimes, if you get too descriptive, the dialogue loses the impact it's supposed to have. I really enjoyed how everyone interacts with each other in this universe.

Anyway, I'm really looking forward to seeing what's going to happen now that everything seemes to be over for good.

Thanks for writing this!

I love the story so far. I like the way you start it off without a full story and kind of hang off of a One Night Stand scenario like this, and the title's great, too. I like how Kendall's character is explained and portrayed in this. Great job!

Just read this and I absolutely love it. Hope this continues!

Awwww sweet Back when the show first started, I was a big fan for the longest time, but then they disappeared off the face of the planet lol. You brought back my memory of BTR.
I've read the first chapter so far, and it sounds intriguing to read! I'll comment more as I go. Awesome work! Love the layout.

I like the idea of this story. The only thing I really have to say is maybe elaborate a tad more. I feel like I get the idea, but not the whole entire idea of how/why Kendall and Jess feel this way. Seems kind of very fast paced. Same goes for with James and the guys when talking about Jess. Other than that, I like it. Keep up the good work

Besides being dropped into the story i like the way the character who's famous has a completely normal reaction. its easy to forget they are real people and write them as if they are gods. this story feels like maybe it could really happen and when it comes to fan fiction realism is a big part of making the reader feel emotionally attached to the characters. keep writing it will only get better with time!

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i like how you just dropped us into the story. being suddenly emeressed in the story and slowly finding out about the characters is one of my favorite story arch types.

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I liked the fast paced beginning. It really helped to just jump in the story. I agree completely with savemefrommyself down there. More emotions will help your story. You have a great style though. This story has a lot of potential. Great job!

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I really liked these first few chapters! They were very well written, good length, and very descriptive! There were only one or two grammar errors, so that was good! I like the layout, it fits fairly well with the story! I think I will continue reading! I'm not sure whether I like James or Kendall more right now! I'm thinking James! Kendall seems like a rude drunk!

I just love that you have a BTR story! There aren't many at all!

First off, I really love the layout - it's important to tie a reader in and you did just that. However, I agree with the comment below me that there are things you need to work on like: detail, emotion. Personally, if I read something with excellent detail, it makes me wanting more. Keep writing!

Interesting start, a one night stand as an opening chapter. Not bad, it all sort of moves really fast though. Detail, emotion and what brings a story to life is one of those key things. You have a good sense of writing,but it's slowing down and letting the story write itself. You have to get the reader to relate, or hate the characters and when I read...I didn't feel the emotion.It was just all moving. I don't think you should give up on the story,because you can write,and its not bad writing,but feel the story and picture what's in your head - bring it alive. But keep writing,because if it's what you enjoy doing,nothing I say or what others say should matter.

@ Btrluvinator Uh, I'm not sure. I don't think so.... and yeah I like Kendall best.

Real life. I dont think so cuz all tht night i searched it up and it didnt say anything. Are you a schmidter? I m

@ Btrluvinator in my story or in real life....?