Criminal - Comments

@ forever_hustler definitely not forgotten! i just haven't had lots of time to write lately. hopefully i will be able to soon!

please please please update! i don't want this story to be forgotten about !! :)

so in love with how the story is going already ! :)

ahhhhhh! this is soo good!

ugh, SO happy to see this got updated :) <3.

aw, he actually didn't drink to keep Lauren safe aw bless. I think it's hilarious that he gets to witness her drunk though haha. It sucks that her mom doesn't stay in and take care of her though. I get she's a teenager, but it shouldn't be an every night thing, that's bullshit. I like the ending of their conversation. But I KNOW this is going to cause problems with her friends, and I'm really anxious for that.

Oh, she's already lying. BIG MISTAKE, IT'S GOING TO COME BACK. and now she's going to be a bitch to Alex. You have a great time, he makes sure you're home safe, and then you do this shit. Okay, I knew this was going to happen but it still pisses me off so. Good for Alex, fucking bitch for treating him like that. IM SO MAD AND NOW I HAVE TO WAIT LIKE 7 DAYS FOR AN UPDATE AH.

I really like how Alex is described in this story. In most high school stories he's portrayed as this hot, sexual, popular guy, while in this one he's more laid back and sticks to his music. The iPod thing though I love, proof of a real music lover. Not to brag, but I do that myself ;D.

I also really like how Lauren isn't some little depressed girl who cuts and is suicidal and has no other plot than that, which I also see A LOT. I really like how she has a completely NEW outlook on life, and though her friends may be complete assholes, I like the dynamic. and I honestly really like Courtney.. Marissa is the one who I'm not a big fan of haha.

I'm starting to dislike Marissa more and more as I read through the chapters. She just... is mean and snotty, it's annoying. But I like the conversation with the teacher and how Lauren was mentally begging her to stop; sounds like me after some conversations with my dad haha. Oh, I also like how you got Alex into chapter 2 - I feel like this is where their relationship - whatever it may be - is going to start, WOO!

Well, not DURING detention it turns out, but right after. I like how he got her through music, let's hope that her music taste changes to wonderfulness after seeing All Time Low play. But I have to say this - you portray Alex SO WELL. Everything you have him say/do is just so.. Gaskarth. That's probably the gayest sentence I've ever written, but it's true. You do a really great job at that, this must be why I like your writing so much ;D. I like how he's taking her with him to band practice.. I'm excited to see how she reacts with the guys. And calling her princess, I don't know, I really liked that, because she is. Her attitude, her clothes, her everything screams a little too high maintenance.

At first I wasn't TOO fond of Lauren, but I'm honestly starting to appreciate her little awkward qualities and her overall. AH KARA IS IN THE STORY GOD BLESS AMERICA... understood why Lisa isn't in it. "Jack, the human garbage disposal" that's me in a sentence haha I loved that. I loved all of the chatpers, but chapter four was defenitly my favorite. I love how Kara got her right in and how you got the boys to interact, its all just so good SO FUCKING GOOD ALRIGHT.

anyway, please update soon! I love this story :)

I kinda am obsessed with this....... just saying(:

Please don't give up on this story. It looks like it could be good.

This story has soooooo much potential (: update soon

Aww this is cute, but you should inform your reader's it's an Alex Gaskarth fiction in your short summary thing(: