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Thank you! :)
December 6th, 2011 at 11:54pm
River Young;
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Ah! Its over! It was good! And very sweet! :)
November 21st, 2011 at 06:31pm
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To Aha!I'm CaptainHook! ~Yeah, I'll probably go back and fix the dialogue and paragraphs later, I wanna get it up first. Thanks for reading and commenting. :)
November 11th, 2011 at 12:08am
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Comment Virginity!!! :D
Okay, first. When a new person starts talking, you should make it a new paragraph. Such as:
Eve said, "......"
"...." Ryder said.
Dialogue needs a little tweeking there. Your description is very good, easy to follow, not too deep.
I like it! :)
November 10th, 2011 at 11:57pm
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