January 13th, 2012 at 09:54am
Again, I f*cking love the banner.
Also I can't believe you still remember spaghetti is like the only thing I can cook- or that my grandma is Italian. So many little things you know about me have been woven into this beautiful story and it breaks my heart. This is so amazing!
<3
I also thought your summary really captured the essence of what you're trying to achieve. It reads like a synopsis, or a thesis. The only thing I would really nitpick about it is this bit:
A mix and match of fairytales, humor, and romance. In which two characters fall in love over and over again in the timeless plots we all have grown to love.
I really don't think you should start a sentence with 'in which'. It's disruptive, and not necessary. Make the two sentences one.
In terms of the actual story, I think you've given some real character to the scene, as well as to the characters themselves- especially in the introduction. I like that you're going into detail with your descriptions, as that really brings the story to life. I don't think it dragged at any point. The plot is also pretty creative, and your dialogue shows that.
Well done with this!