Empty Sighs and Mary Jane - Comments

Whole time I was reading this, I was thinking, Longview.
As in, y'know, the song.
It's pretty amazing; the story and the similarities.

"Once it was lit, I watched the words of a God who had turned his back on me long ago burn steadily..."

Wow. The effect alone these words have, combined with the simple yet vivid imagery, and the "numbed", careless tone...is just wow.

Honestly, I thought this was going to be some weird fan fiction about Mary Jane from Spiderman but then me and my friend read it and he was like "I like how she used Mary Jane instead of pot" and I just felt stupid after he said that. But I really like the start of this so far. Totally subscribing.

I swear I love everything you write, you're such a good writer seriously. I liked the fact that you made Mary Jane into two things; the weed and, from what I got, a girl. I think the story was quite funny, with that fact that he's doing all this in his grandparents basement. Loved it. (:

I feel incredibly stupid for not getting this right away. Aha. I was halfway through it and it just hit me. I was like oh my god, that's what she's talking about! And that picture...I love it. I saw it and I just started laughing. The layout itself is nice to. It's simple and nice.

I love reading anything you write. Honestly. You say nonsensical, but I don't think so. It's a great piece. Really interesting and pretty short too. xD
I'd say eight letters late. is pretty close with the percentage too. Maybe a little less, but I'm sure it's very realistic in any case.
There's a guy somewhere, doing everything from this story...right now. I bet. xD

I loved this!
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Rolling the blunt from the Bible pages. Lololol.
I love how this is just the totally secret life of every guy in existence. Because they all do le marijuana in their basement while watching gay porn and jacking off. Obviously. You have skills to make that interesting, not just comical.

This is great. :D
Seriously, I don't even know what to say about it. This kid is pretty pathetic, but that's okay because I'm pretty sure 50% of guys are just like him. At least. So he shouldn't feel so alone. You're a really good writer, of course. That's a given. You made this interesting even though it was about a guy jacking off to gay porn while smoking the green. I liked it. The layout is good and simple, my favorite kind. I think you could write anything and it would still be interesting! (:

"...watching the rings float the the ceiling and disappear." The first the should be to.

I don't think this was nonsensical. I think it was weird, but it made sense. JOB WELL DONE, ALEXXX.

Comment virginity? :D

Anywho, I really liked this a lot. I like how blunt it was, and how the character admitted how pathetic he was. I also liked the fact that he was rolling a blunt with pages from the Bible, because it just kind of pounded it into the reader's head that this kid literally doesn't give a fuck about anything. He seems like he's going to be a really interesting character and I'm looking forward to reading more of this. I think you did an excellent job with this, your writing was flawless and the way you introduced the character was perfect. I'm definitely subscribing(: