The World Is Closing In - Comments

are you writing more? i like it :3

I like this story so far! Please continue? :)

The flow is a little off with the constant "I did this" and "I did that", and the beginning is a bit dull to be honest, doesn't grab my attention much. The paragraph spacing is a but off too, there should be a blank line between every new paragraph, the tags and whatnot for dialogue are wrong too. I like the chemistry between her and the friends, the sort of laid back comfortableness between all of them. Other than that, nothing really happens.