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  • PianistGone4Biscuit

    PianistGone4Biscuit (100)

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    its a really nice opening 4 d story and im expectin it to link into the rest of the story.
    i liek the way it applys to everyone and makes so much sense!
    it was reallly reallly good
    March 6th, 2007 at 09:05pm
  • Technophile

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    This story shows great promise.

    The only crit I would have is you might want to watch your grammar; periods and elipses (...) goes in the speaker tags. You were also missing some apostophies.

    Other then the scattered grammatical mistakes, I like. I like alot.
    March 6th, 2007 at 01:22am
  • Couture Whore.

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    I am addicted! MORE!!!
    March 6th, 2007 at 01:13am
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