This Could Be All I've Waited For - Comments

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Good story, but could you adjust the layout so the font is a lot bigger than it is now? I've having trouble seeing it and the only way I can is zooming it in.

You could use more than just 'He' when you are just talking about what is happening around in general. I found it very descriptive and I enjoyed it :3

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NO! I want more. Can there please be a lovey dovey moment? Please, please, please... I need some fluff after all that. Haha.

Oh damn. That was a roller coaster and I love it! Haha.
I do hope there's more. :)

Please please please update soon >.< I'm hooked >.< Poor Alex D':

Your character development is good, and the dialogue seems to flow pretty well. However, there's quite a few few sentences that are difficult to understand first time round; you need to use a few more comma to help break them up a little.

Example: At that Alex pouted and whined again as he remembered what he had demanded Jack after said boy asked what he wanted for his birthday since they have agreed no material things because that’s just lame. I had to re-read that sentence a couple of times. A comma after 'birthday' would greatly improve the flow, and there's quite a few other bits that need either commas or need to be separate sentences.

Also, there are several lines that don't really fit in with a third person narrative.

But the character interactions are good, and I thought your descriptions were very nice.

Comment Swap here. I can't help but notice that your two main characters are Jack and Alex and your title is a line from an All Time Low song... It's either a huge coincidence or very, very clever on your part. Haha! No, but this story has great bones. I don't normally read smut, but this seemed bearable enough, so keep up the good work! You're doing great!

Oh God. That was the cruelest thing. Please don't tell me this is just going to get worse?

You're killing me. Where's the cliche love story.
Hating you right now.

WHAT?
What are you doing?
This is messed up.
Oh man, fix this. I swear.
I was even imagining a cheesy reunion.
Great way to ruin that for me, ei?

**Comment Swap**
So, I just wanna say, clever. Very, VERY clever. Using Jack and Alex and naming the story after a line in an All Time Low song. Dare I assume you're kind of a fan?(: Also, this story has great bones. I can't wait until I see more(: I will definitely be subscribing. Keep writing, you're awesome!

Hello there. :) Well, let's get started, shall we? I was brought to this interesting story of yours from comment swap. Actually, I liked it. The main idea of the story seems really interesting and I find myself wondering in what kind of journey will your story take me. Xd I like the characters you created and I wonder how they will develop. Xd The description were well done and the dialogue flows pretty nice. Your writing skills are pretty good. Overall, I liked this and I'm waiting for more. Keep up the great work and share your imagination with me and your fans. Xd

Aw man. That sucks.
And holy shit about the drag your cigarette. I just crack up. LOL
UPDATE SOON.
Knowing you it might take another year yeah? haha JK. ;)

Ooohhh.. comment virginity. Muhahaha.
Jezz. I was hoping for a necky... waaahhh
But why that ending damn. You need to update soon, kay?
Kay. Haha :D