Okay so I have many comments on this story. I don't think you should start it with 'rape' but whatever tickles your fancy, maybe it's just me. You might want to try reworking your character development, it was a little rough. The story could have been smoother. It felt like you jumped from present time to flashback/thoughts too early and rapidly. Try to give the reader a bit more time to analyse the character them self before giving them the character's life story. Just a few tips, otherwise have fun writing
August 24th, 2012 at 10:37pm