It Started With a Tattoo - Comments

dont kill him off kill of the jerk lol more please

I just kind of rolled through, but it looks much better!

It should make everyone's life a bit easier when they read it. (:

I don't know how to comment on your actual page, which is dumb on my part but really what I mean is this:

You write dialogue like this. "So guess what?" she said. "I don't know, what?" he asked. "Well blah blah blah." "No way!"

It's supposed to be like this because it's easier to read:
"So guess what?" she said.

"I don't know, what?" he asked.

"Well, blah blah blah."

"No way!"

It makes it so much easier to read and to keep up with. I hope I helped, if not, shoot me another comment with whatever questions you have.

I really like the story line so far. I've only read chapter one so far because I find the story hard to read because of the way you set up dialogue. They get lost and I have to go back and read it. It's just really difficult to read because of it.

Just a suggestion. (:

love love love !!

i would so kick his ass for trying shit lol update soon

Love this please update soon sooooo gooooood

well she finally got her damn answers! lol
i wanna know what he's going to tell her next!!!

Oh damn that gotta hurt I mean it just hurt when I hit my head against the table but to have a table basically thrown at you uh.... OUCH!!!

oww head shot to the face from a table? that's gotta hurt! i know i dont want that.
i really wonder what either of those boys' pasts are now. i have a question also. do you think maybe you could find a picture of what you think they look like and put them in the characters? i love to see the authors version of how they look compared to mine.

I love this story already :')

woo first! and i absolutely adore this story. i like the chemistry that's starting to brew between the two :)