How to Save a Life - Comments

Awesome job!!!!
How To Save A Life is my favorite song by The Fray. I was singing the song in my head the whole time I read this. =]
You wrote this so well, I was able to picture it all in my head. It was slightly eerie, the way the teddy bear ended up back on her bed, but it went well with the story.

Good Job!!!!!! Hope you place in the contest!!! =D

The layout is gorgeous :)
The lyrics from 'How To Save A Life' by the Fray in the description and the chapter kind of made me start singing it, aha.
but oh my god, that chapter. My heart just hurt the whole time I was reading it. Usually a lot of dialogue irritates me, but it was so needed in this, and you did it wonderfully.
This line, It was just high enough for him to be hanged appropriately, but wasn't thick enough to hold his deadweight. is my favourite. I notice Robin 'The Sidekick has called you out for using 'hanged' but 'hanged' is definitely the right word to use in this context. I hate it, and think it sounds clunky, but it's the proper word, and that whole sentence is wonderfully heart wrenching. It paints such a morbid picture and the reader definitely feels pathos. This was very well done.

Okay, that was very well written. For starters, I think you may have done the female perspective better than I do, and I'm actually a girl.

But seriously, this was beautiful. Your use of imagery was excellent. I felt like I was actually there, and it was lovely. I jumped like I heard the crack of the branch breaking. It terrified me. And that bear bit at the end, that was just spooky, but a fitting ending to the story.

In the song-fic perspective, you skillfully wove the lyrics into the dialogue. It meshed. That is one pet peeve I have for song-fics. Lyrics are used as dialogue and it makes absolutely no sense. You didn't have that problem.

Very well done.

Wow. I think I could just write that and you'd be happy. But I won't because I could just be another person who doesn't read the story and just writes a random comment. So I'll prove to you that I read it. This One-shot was amazing. I mean, since I have heard the song before I knew he was gonna commit suicide. So throughout the story I was just thinking to myself "Just shut up and don't say anything," I've been pushing the tears back for a while now.

This was deep but it happens. Just the way you wrote it it happens. I mean, I've lost a couple friends to suicide, I've also had some friend attempt it and end up in the hospital. My closest friend is currently suicidal. And this is how it is. You can't really talk them out of it. You end up pushing them to do it. My neighbor shot himself (it's one of those one houses that has two sides) and I head it. I thought he dropped a TV or something because it didn't sound like a shot.

I mean, I didn't know. It was the last thing on my mind. Worst yet my mom was in the hospital at the time and I didn't get to cry in her arms.

But, I love this because it tells a true story that many of us go through.

There's only one mistake I caught and it's this one: It was just high enough for him to be hanged appropriately, but wasn't thick enough to hold his deadweight.

I think you can put hung instead of hanged. I don't think hanged is a word. I don't know, maybe I'm wrong. But this is amazing and I'm gonna subscribe even though it's a one-shot.

it's wonderful. glad u got the song cuzz u spun an amazing tale from it. . . :)

CREEPY
Why, creepy, Why do you follow me everywhere?
HOW THE HELL DID THAT TEDDY GET BACK ON HER BED??

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Yeah.

Anyways, that was wonderful (despite the creepy). You have this wonderful sense of writing and I can picture everything nicely. The song you were inspired by is one of my favorite songs. I've been singing it the whole time I read this, hahaha.

Your layout is so nice. I don't understand how you make such nice ones when I failed at making layouts when I first joined, haha. I like the teddy bear. I have a soft spot for teddy bears, haha.

I adored the setting, too. I've always loved forest settings. No matter how creepy or sad a story is, I will love it if it has forest setting. And I love this. ♥ You're an amazing writer, =)

=P First to comment and you don't even have any chapters yet. Lol

I just wanted to say that I LOVE the layout and the banner. Well done! The summary also, is great. It really pulls me in and I'll definitely subscribe to this one to see what you come up with.