Lone artist - Comments

it's a short chapter and ik you said you would update more, but i don't know how to really judge it. overall, i think it's a good start and you need to add in much more detail and maybe fix some grammar but aside that, i think your off to a good start!

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Okay. As your new editor, here's what I found: Second Paragraph: "wiping" us misspelled (you put whipping) "perspiration" is misspelled, and "room" is misspelled. I'm pretty sure they're just typos, though. I think there were a few more, but I forgot them. Oh! And try to use commas to make longer sentences, rather than short sentences, and you shouldn't start sentences with conjunctions (e.g. "And" & "But"). Only under certain grammar rules can you do that. (You: wow. Thts seriously pointless! Me: Excuse me Young Lady! It most certainly does matter!) lol jk! It doesnt, really. Haha. :) <3