Like Destinee said in club, there needs to be more sexual tension. It's cute in a cheesey way, but it can't really be taken seriously. Their love is happening too fast, a mistake that happens a lot in Frerards. Their relationship should be taken more slowly. A lot of flirting before the moment they kiss.
Wow it's sooo sweet :))) like, perfect love. I'd like more conversations though too :))) so it would be less perfect, but if you want it to be really silent it's okay too :D up to you :)))
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