Murder in the Dark - Comments

I like your style, with the short choppy paragraphs it works very well. I have only read the first chapter so far but i like the playfulness and the dialogue reads well and realistic. The only thing is i dont really like the background image, but thats just personal preference, but you could maybe make it a bit more colourful other than that i love it so far :-)

I like your style of writing and you've got a good idea here. Just two things that really bugged me. One, Add some more color to the background. Right now its just blah. Two, bring your sentences/paragraphs closer together. These are just little nit-picky things that I noticed (I'm a little bit of a perfectionist). Keep it up! :3