Captive - Comments

It's great that you're editing it, but I think you should plan out exactly what you want to write for the next five chapters so that you know where you're going with the story and all you need to do is just fill it with details.

Interesting beginning, but the vagueness of the plot is a little concerning. I like how you ended it with a nice cliff hanger, but I feel like you rushed the beginning of the story. Take your time and it looks like this might be really awesome. Can't wait to see what happens next!