Savage - Comments

The layout makes the story very difficult to read. I had to zoom in very close in order to read it. Even after that the colors made it virtually impossible to read. You are lucky that I scored a 100 on my DRPs.

Other then that I really loved the story. I love how you gave the entire story a mystical feel to it. I really love the lion and the spider story. This is very original too this is much different than anything I have read on Mibba or in published books... and I am a freak with how much I read. I actually did enjoy this.

To me the layout is kind of plain, but nice all the same. What I don't like about it, is the fact that the text scrolls over the image. It makes it somewhat difficult for me to read. The summary really drew me in, because I relate alot to the quote you have placed there.

The figurative language you use in the story is amazing. Especially in the very first chapter - the story of the Lion & Spider. I don't believe I've seen anything like that on Mibba, which is pretty cool.

I normally do not read guy/guy stories, but yours is well written, so I am. I really like the second chapter. The part about the tattoo was just hilarious to me. Not because he's being yelled at, but the way you write what's going on gives me an a m a z i ng image of what's going on.

When it gets to the third chapter, there is more of an anxious feeling. You did very well with writing that too. The fourth chapter is my favourite. It's a combination of everything a story should be, and I like that. Xavier is most definitely my favourite character here. This story = keep.

The layout is nice and I like the first chapter. I usually don't read boy on boy stories but this one seems pretty original and has a good plot. I've never read anything like it before which is refreshing. I hate reading the same types of stories over and over again and with this, that is not the case here. It's a lovely story though I think everything happens too fast in my personal opinion. I do like it though and am surprised you do not have way more comments! Good luck with this story and have a wonderful day!

I don't understand why this hasn't got more comments. That is seriously beyond me.

Okay, so this story is absolutely captivating, from the characters to the descriptions. When it comes to originality, the idea for this trumps most supernatural slash stories that I've read so far. The writing is exquisite and I love the differences between the Lion and Spider chapters (and I really love this whole Lion and Spider theme as well, it's so great) - the perspectives are obviously different but they still fit perfectly together. You guys are doing a great job on that.

I really want to know more about these people and what's happening and just - everything. I'm intrigued! Please keep writing this <3

I get to comment first because I didn't write this chapter and so I think that counts!

The introduction! It reminds me of a romance novel, all epic and dramatic and wistful and all that but that's okay because how they're referred to as animals makes it so different. <3333

I love how he spoke with his dad, all proper and yes sir~ and then proceeded to immediately go and blatantly disobey him. The descriptions, or how it's told through his eyes, once he sees the boy is very animalistic, and perfect for a Lion. I also like how the kid's all WTF!! And then there's the part where he just leaves and I'm left wondering what happens next omg, because even i don't know.

And I love that you asked me to coauthor, Sophie! =DDDDDDDDD