Heartbeat - Comments

please continue

Why is this only a one shot? It's brilliant!

i love this!! :D
i'm sad that it's only a one-shot!
i wish you would write longer stories!
<3 Holly

i think this should definitely become a full story. there is a lot of potential to it. loved it! (:

It was really well written, and from what little we saw of Draco I thought you fit him very well. The brief moments of realism quickly masked by his facade. There were some awkward phrasing of dialogue in here, and action. Also you keep spelling 'stared' like 'starred'. A few spelling errors here and there, and also some tense changes you should go through and fix. I do think this would prove better as a chaptered story rather than a one shot. Harry Potter fictions can never be just one shot in my opinion because it's such a complex world that there's so much detail about a relationship and even the actions around that that need to be explained. Otherwise, great job.

dont make it a one shot please make it a couple shot lol if there is such thing, i like no love it :)