Te Amo - Comments

"But I’d never been one to look a gift horse in the mouth." My favorite line! The banner and divider are both exquisitely beautiful. The wording was rather informal for a Greek God, in my opinion, but it is your writing. It would be more moving if there were more emotions flowing during the touches and kisses as well- it seems that much emotion and affection was stated rather than described.

All I can say to this story is this.

I have read greek mythology inspired stories. I have read, and critiqued and even written them. But not one of them, not one, has been as original as this story was.

You captured the mind of the ruler of the dead, romanticised the more popular 'kidnapping' story into a romance, and all with a flourish of poetry and description. This has been an interesting read. And you truly are talented.

Great work.

I really enjoyed your story! I love that you did a story about Hades & Persephone & that you made Hades out to be a good guy! I've always wanted to do a story similar to this. There should definitely be more greek mythology on mibba. Especially if it's written like your's & if it's about Hades.
He's my favorite greek god.

Absolutely stunning story. I struggle immensely with first person, and I think I've learned a lot from reading this fic. Thank you. [:

So I actually left your entry till last, purely because it was the longest and I didn't want to skim over anything.
Anyway, I thorougly enjoyed reading this. I knew it was going to be different when you asked if you were allowed to enter a story with your own interpretation.
It's refreshing to see Hades in such a caring, innocent light. In everything I've ever read/watched I haven't been surprised by his actions and emotions until now. And I loved the fact that you twisted the classic tale so it was actually Persephone's doing.
Lastly, you really have done your research, or perhaps you just love Greek Mythology (maybe more than me by the look of it!), so I'm ignoring any nitpicking like pomeranate seeds & such ;)
Fantastic :)

I loved this story! The only thing is Persephone ate three pomegranate seeds, not six. So she stays in the Underworld for three months out of the year, which is when we have the three months of winter becuase her mother was so upset by her daughter's departure to the underworld she didn't have the earth bloom.

Ah! I've just finished it and I still love it. I don't have much to say other than how much I enjoyed this and it's sparked me to want to read more of your work. Everything in my past comment is still accurate, I love that you kept all the myths accurate, and the goddesses and gods and what not, and yet you made this one your own. Great job.

Yes! I'm so sorry I can't give a long detailed comment on just how much I love this story and why. I guess first off is it's Greek Mythology, and Secondly it's TWISTED Greek Mythology. Hades is the good guy, and Persephone wanted to be with him, which I always gave him her love out of pity for the poor god. Thirdly the way you wrote, the formal delicate description is tres magnific (I know I spelt that wrong, just bear with me here.). Anyway, I guess you can tell I like your writing since I've gone and read a lot of your other stuff. But this remains my favorite, likely just because it's Greek. I'm still going to be subscribed, even if it's over.

I re-read the first chapter and then read the second. Seriously your descriptions are beautiful. Everything just sounds so formal and delicate and perfect. I don't know how to tell you how much I love this. I've only just started taking Greek Mythology and while I'm familiar with names I'm not as familiar with much of the myths. Right now we're learning of Theseus and the Minotaur, and then we learned of how Zeus came to the kingdom. It was weird, Cronus swallowed all the babies then realized Zeus was still alive and vomited them up and something about how Zeus was destined to take over Olympia? Whatever. ANYWAY. I like the direction you're taking this and I like that Persephone is the forward one. Everytime I think of Hades I think of the Hades from Hercules. But yours I think of one completely different, and that's good. I'm excited to read on and see where you go. I'm just so glad you've done research with this and all your accurate portrayals.

I noticed one typo in the last chapter. we let out guard dog starve. we let our ?

Fuuuuuuu. STOP TORMENTING ME WITH THE AMAZING-NESS. JUST STOP. Omigod. I get really into this story, that's how wonderful you are. Stop it. My heart can't take the epic-ness. If you don't get the next chapter up soon, I'll probably cry. No pressure. Ha, ha. I was sooooo not expect that. Lol. Best thing ever.

First of, Dis is absolutely my favorite god, besides Apollo. (Because Apollo is sexy as all hell.)

By the way, the actual name for Hades is DIS, not Hades. Hades is the name of the realm in which he rules. I just thought I should point that out; ever since I learned that in Honors English it's bugged the hell out of me.

~jus' sayin'

Your first chapter had this element of humor that I wasn't expecting, and it was really pleasing, and funny, and it made me smile. I like smiling. It's good for the face.

Lol speaking nonsense.
But it just gave this element of cute to Dis that I thought was needed.
You don't often see Dis painted in that kind of light, soo.~

In the second chapter, I noticed that you said that the Gods created the mortal race. It was actually the titans who created the mortals, but the Gods who saved them. Just a thought.
And I could be wrong, but I always thought that.

Awwww, Dis gets so cute in the second chapter. I think it's funny.
I just, I hate to see that get ruined by the pomegranates from the Underworld.
Poor guy.

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Poor Persephone.

ANYWAYS.
I have to read more because I love this story to death.
So I'm going to get to that. Soon. Eventually.

You've no idea how excited I was to see an update for this. =D

Love. There's nothing more to say. <3

First of all, I love, love, love your layout. I love the pink, the banner, and it's just too cute :3

Usually, I'm not a fan of Greek Mythology, but your story is making me have some change of heart. I love how you describe everything so perfectly. Your writing style is terrific. I also love Hades character and how he describes Persephone's beauty.

Other than that, I love this story overall. Keep it up; you're a brilliant writer!

Wow, this is great. First off, I absolutely adore the layout, it's elegant and fitting to the story. And the story itself is amazing, I love how you add so much detail without making it drag on and seem like a bore. I always loved mythology, and romance, so this is like the perfect combination of the two, and I like the idea of a romance between Persephone and Hades instead of him kidnapping her. This was amazingly written-so keep up the good writing. I think I saw maybe one spelling error, though I can't remember where, so it was probably something insignificant, so good job on that. Anyways, great story, and I can't wait to read more! =)

Three words.

This is beautiful.

I love the layout, this makes the story seem relaxing, it was, it had a comedic type and was really unique.. I love the way you write though, I wish i could write like that.. I like the way you poytrayed the characters, really nice, I hope you keep writing :)

Oh my god, it's so beautiful and great! It was actually kind of inspirational - you're an amazing write.
And I must say; the layout is awesome and simply perfect.

Ffffffff. I fan girl over this. SO. HARD. I love how you write. It's so amazing. :')
Y U SO PERFECT?

Also, is the fruit in the picture pomegranate? If it is, I totally understand the banner now.

Well, I've already read the first chapter, so I'll just comment on the second.

I think it's cute how Hades is so smitten, and how he's so nervous around Persephone. I also like his voice. It's eloquent and articulate, even though he's Hades and you'd think he'd be like, Ugh, that girl, I'm gonna defile her body and then burn it to ash! But he seems almost gentle, and that was just kind of unexpected for me.

I like how you include little facts about Greek mythology in here. It makes it interesting and genuine.

In the last sentence, "out" should be "our". But that was the only mistake I spotted. You're great with words!