I like this story it's very interesting. I think though that you need to add a summary though because a summary draws people in. And make a custom back ground. If you don't know how then ask someone. I would but I don't know how to. Otherwise, great job. Oh yeah a sequel might be nice or instead of making this a one shot make this a longer story with more chapters.
June 8th, 2012 at 03:57pm