Little Red - Comments

Comment swap:
Im such a sucker for love stories. Im loving Kaige. I think hes by far one of the reasons I'm falling in love with this story. Youre writing is great. Usuually on stories with longer chapter I get over it pretty fast, but you're narrative keeps me engaged. The first 3 chapters alone had me glued just cus I wanted to find out how red is a "half breed" Wasnt sure if her dad was wolf living in the skin of someone he killed, or if they had adopted her etc. I kept looking for hints! haha. This is a great twist to a classic fairytale.

Doing the comment swap thing. I must say that this is a very interesting way of retelling the Little Red Riding Hood story. You obviously are a very skill writer, thanks to all of your flowery descriptions. They were truly beautiful. You're characters have quite a bit of depth to them, feeling like actual people instead of stereotypes.

Although, I must say, not updating a story because of a lack of comments is extremely petty and shows that you really don't care about your work. You hold it hostage instead of it grow. Look, people may not comment on you're story, but that doesn't mean they don't like it. They're just lazy (which I am very guilty of doing). Don't punish us, just continue on.

I hope this review was satisfactory.

I absolutely love this story! You have no idea. Your plot was amazing and the descriptions were beautiful. Everything about this story was executed wonderfully! You didn't have too much dialogue and it wasn't so long and drawn out that it got boring. I think you did an amazing job. I thought the second chapter had a few too many section breaks. It got overwhelming and a tad bit annoying. It just seemed strange.

This is for the new comment swap.
To start, I really like your layout and banner. It definitely fits the story :). In the summary you have a typo where it says '... and killed th leader of the wolves.' I'm sure it's a ‘the’ and you were just typing quickly, I do that all the time lol. In chapter one you start out by talking to the reader, it's an interesting start. I kinda like it. There's a typo in the parentheses. "If you can call a story" I think you meant "... call it a story". As the chapter progresses there are more typos, but I'm sure you'll see them if you look it over. The way you describe the girl’s father comes off a little awkward to me, but that might just be because I haven't read descriptions like that before. I think this needs a re-read. It’s good, but there are a few typos and odd phrases that I think sounds a little awkward. The twist at the end of the chapter, with the ears is great. :)

So excited for the next chapter!
I hope Red doesn't die! haha.

KILL HER :D
Anyways I love the story! :)

:< NO!!!!!!! make another! Make another!!! D:
oh, and idk if i just read it wrong but when she's at the pub and says "why?" I thought it should be "what?" why implies she heard what was whispered

Liking the story!
Its definitely an original idea, which is pretty amazing. :)
Can't wait for the next chapter!

I really like this one!! :D
I too like how you write but
"Eve had only been five when one night, her mother had come to her during the night. " << the redundant 'night' ruined my recording of me reading this in my fake British accent!! D:

I love this so far! (:
The idea is great, and I love how you write. Just your choice of words and stuff...
Anyway.. continue! (: