Little Hell - Comments

Amazing.

i absolutely love this story, and the characters i wish you updated more often :)

Holy shit, this is a really good story.

Thank god Glen's mother croaked for starters, since now the two don't have to be together. Secondly, thank GOD glen has died too. Or injured himself. God, I hope he dies.

I feel bad for Kale since he tries so hard, but I can't help but go for the underdog. GO KALE!

I am going to marry you, as illegal as it is, because I love this story. And I will sue you for your ten pennies in your underwear drawer if you delete this. c:

So, I'm kind of flailing because I love when guys chase after the girl. And Blaire.. Blaire, I want to know more my pretty, I must know more. She seems like an interesting character that will have a lot of depth as you continue on writing. I also like how she's kind of bitter, I don't know why though.

And now. I demand you to write UNTIL YOUR LITTLE HEART CAN NO LONGER WRITE... or you know.. whenever you get the time.. heh.

I only saw one error:
She gave him a small smile. “Your story wouldn’t be a good one without any twists now would it?”
^ If you go to it on the story, it's just spaced wrong, but other than that I didn't see any other ones.

So lovely.

Interesting. I like it.

I normally only go for Fan Fiction because most original stories cant seem to keep my attention or interest. But your story as surprisingly peeked my curiousity. Nice work. :)

this is lovely and im obsessed with city and colour ^_^

I really love this story because both chapters get right to the point at the very beginning :D

In the first paragraph, 4th sentence, you said: To most people, it'd be very ordinary occurrence but to Blaire...
There should be an "a" between be and very.

Dude, what, LFJKFKJKJGDF;JGDSLK KILL GLEN. JUST KILL HIS CHARACTER. NO. I DON'T LIKE HIM.

The tough girl on the outside was a shattered girl on the inside.
I really like that sentence ^-^

Awww, Kale is so cute ^-^ I would date him. Hard.

After Blaire says hi to Jacob you said: She took her seat and waited to be served by the kind waiter and Kale quickly caught up to her and took a seat beside.
I think it should say "took a seat beside her".

I kind of had the feeling that Jacob had liked Blaire ;D

Overall it was another amazing chapter :D You're such a good writer. Please update again soon!

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I like how Blaire is all badass and quirky and amazing.
Then Kale is just intrigued by her badassery. (That's not even a word but I'm using it anyway.)
& somehow, I think the story is even better because it's not in first person POV.
Definitely going to look forward to the story updates in my inbox.

I subscribed a couple of days ago, but I just read the first chapter.
I'm really liking this even it it just one chapter in. The characters are are a mystery to me, and I want to know more. Blaire's attitude is intriguing and I'm looking forward to see if she keeps her attitude, or if it changes.
I also really like the layout.

I can't wait to read more!

Let me start out by saying the title of the story is very intriguing. The layout and banner are flawless. The summary sounds like me xD

I love the opening paragraph. It gets right to the point.

Overall, I think the story is wonderful and I'm subscribing.

I am so definitely subscribing to this story. <3

It was very interesting. At first I thought she'd be another one of those stuttering idiots or blushing maniacs (like I'm going to make my character, ahem) but as I went farther into their conversation, I was smitten. I really like Blaire. <3 She's such an antisocial. For some reason, I just am really excited to see how this relationship is going to progress. Please, write more.

From yours truly,
Echo

This story is brilliant.

Your characters are such a mystery right now, but I love how much you give away in the first chapter. You really capture Blair's twisted sense of humor and how much she guards herself. It really makes me want to learn more. And Kale seems so smooth and innocent.

I really can't wait to see where this story will go! Hope you update soon.

Ah, I love their new album, and that song is just great! Your layout is very pretty and simple. Blaire seems like such a light character, I don't know how to put how I feel about her into words. But I really do like her. The way she answers, something about her. Aha. And this boy Kale, he seems quite interesting himself. This chapter really gets me to want to know more. Subscribing, great work xx

I really like this so far. You've earned yourself a new reader. Subscribed.