This was a sweet story - really sad, but I'm glad the ending was happy. I really liked the description used throughout; it helped to create a good image of the scene, and describe what was going on. I noticed one or two grammar mistakes (there was one part where it said 'changes' but it should have said 'changed') but nothing that disrupted the flow of the story. I really liked the build up at the beginning, but I felt that the ending was a bit rushed; the bit where she thought she saw him on the wind could have been developed a bit more. Overall, though, I liked it - well done! :D
This was a sweet story - really sad, but I'm glad the ending was happy. I really liked the description used throughout; it helped to create a good image of the scene, and describe what was going on. I noticed one or two grammar mistakes (there was one part where it said 'changes' but it should have said 'changed') but nothing that disrupted the flow of the story. I really liked the build up at the beginning, but I felt that the ending was a bit rushed; the bit where she thought she saw him on the wind could have been developed a bit more. Overall, though, I liked it - well done! :D