Lamb in the Spring - Comments

The ending was ultimate cuteness. It's realistic, I can see it happening. It's that epic ending to the cutest teen film we all have inside of us. I thought it was well written, you have a lovely idea. My only advice would be to play on your vocab a bit more, throw in some interesting words, play with sentence structure etc,. Liven up. I liked it otherwise.

Ahhhh. I love it. You never disappoint.

It's like you don't even write with words. You write with thoughts. Thoughts and emotions.

And the dedication made me want to dance. :]

YOU NEED TO UPDATE MARY JANE BEFORE I DIE. I swear, next to Lydia and Robert, Mary Jane and Chase are looooved greatly by me. They're so cute and so different, but they work together somehow and I want something like that uber badly. You seriously come up with the best chapters ever and I'm Jell-o of your great talent c:

I like the way Chase describes her as a painting. That's so perfect! I wish that a guy could think of me as a painting. More like a Picasso or something equally abstract or ugly. >_> No offense to the dead artist, but yeah. Anyhoo, I can imagine this cute little scene in a meadow - anything Bambi-like 'cause he describes her as a doe. Also cute! - and he's just deer-watching and he sees this lovely deer named Mary Jane and he falls in love with her. So adorkable and so simple and so lovely. It's pure love!

I love this so much, you have no idea <3

Okay so I just realize that Mary Jane had last been updated in October and this was done today and all I can say is OH MYYY GODDDDD. For being so short (a hundred words -- wow), this plays a whole number of possibilities and scenes in my head. Are they on a date or are they maybe even past the dates and on their way to walk down the aisle? I don't know. I love this, and I love this story, and I want more. You're such a talented author.

Cute, to the point, short, I loved it. It was so simple and sweet. I miss your writing.

This was too cute. Short and sweet. Loved the layout as well