Jaime Fell - Comments

I love how you changed his name to something else by the end and how you spoke metephorically of him "falling" and using the crowned jewels and diamonds to express his perfection in a new way. I like how in the end you repeated yourself, but by changing things completely. it was legitimately a complete upside down change. I can't wait for the update!

I really, really, really need you to update this. Okay bye.

Omg, this was AMAZING! The way you described the rise and fall of life, and how nothing should be taken for granted, even if your this envious figure, it wont last. You have a great way with words. I liked the methaphore you used to describe his eyes being like diamonds, beautiful to look at but they are merely stones. Yup, this was lovely.

I just crossed your profile and saw that you marked this complete. I didn't realize before that it was going to be just a one update thing. lol. My bad.
But this has a learning lesson behind it: don't take the things you have for granted. Because one day, it could all be gone, just like that. :(
Sorry I didn't give a more full review before. XD I feel so embarrassed.
But yeah, great job with this! :D

Wow. This was short but wow. I like it (: the imagery was really interesting xx

This was very interesting. I like the subject in which you're writing about-the person who has it all but still wants more until they fall. It was very well written and your word usuage to discribe the boy's appearance was brillant. Also, I'm not to sure where you're going with this and I like it. There are far to many predictable stories that I've read and I really like the fact that that is not the case here. Excellent work. :)

Hm... this sounds interesting. And it sounds like it has a really strong lesson behind it. :)
Can't wait to see what you have in store!
Definitely... subscribed! :D

Erm, hey! As you comment on my story and make me smile, I thought I'd read this.
AND OMG, your layout <3 It's amazingly pretty, really.
But I loved this, it was short but absolutely perfect. It was all metaphorical (is that the right word?) and how he changed into the King of Despair
Your writing is just so gooood.
:D

Erm, hey! As you comment on my story and make me smile, I thought I'd read this.
AND OMG, you're layout <3 It's amazingly pretty, really.
But I loved this, it was short but absolutely perfect. It was all metaphorical (is that the right word?) and how he changed into the King of Despair
Your writing is just so gooood.
:D