Lies on Paper - Comments

I dig the main plot of this story, with everyone having something special about them depending on the year they were born. The pacing is also great, I could definitely feel the chaos in certain scenes and I felt like I was watching an anime while I read it. (I mean that in a good way, anime is great!) I did have to switch to the default layout to read it, since the custom layout had all the lines squished together, but that can easily be fixed. Great job with this! c:

It's cool. Oh and thanks for fixing your chapters. Now I can finally read it! Yay!!!

@ Aaron's Girl
oh gosh so sorry! It was fine when I first put it up and now that I checked upon it today it was a gigantic mess. I hope it's fixed for you. I'm not really sure what happened there. But I hope you enjoy what I have up so far! (p.s. sorry there's not many chapters yet, it's just I've been busy running around for personal matters lately.)

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I um.... I could hardly read it. Did you layout mess it up? Any way I got the beginning. About the curses being broken and curses being put on family's. I read that much but I couldn't read the chapters. I was actually mad. I really want read this book. The title pulled me in and I was really ready to read a good book. But um... Pleae find a way to pull your words apart so I can read . Please don't take this comment the wrong way.....

I think you have a really great concept for this story! I love the idea of the mythical creatures and the way they change.. and them going insane when they become of age is brillant as well! I did have a bit of trouble reading this though, just because everything was jumbled together. I also noticed a lot of grammar errors with commas, so that might be something that you should check out too, as well as how to correctly format dialogue. Mibba has lots of articles on the subjext that could help you. Other than that, great story and good luck with your writing!

Wow. This is really good. Unique story line so far. Awesome writing style, I must say. This is really quite wonderful. I wish I had come up with something this good! You're very descriptive, which I like a lot in writing. Super good. Keep it up. :DD <3