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I really don't like the bright red bold text...its really annoying and to be honest just hurt my eyes I can guess that you picked that color because of Gerard Way's old hair, but that red is too bright for someone to read comfortably.

For some reason I found myself really disliking Peyton. I know she is confused and wants answers, but she seems almost bratty in a way.

Love this story! Cannot wait to read the next chapter. :D

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I found the layout annoying and very hard to read because of the brighter red. You can make the width tighter and use a darker colour, also the title in it is very unnoticeable too.

A few grammar and spelling mistakes, and the context could use alot more description in the way the characters act too.

Please write chapter 5.

@ Rat Head
lol no its fairly new. it hasn't been there for any updates.

Has that banner always been up there? If so, and I haven't noticed it before, I'm a fucking idiot. It's freaking hot! Sexy, sexy Gee!

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Okay, so my first thought was that I don't find the layout easy to read. And the background picture freaks me out a lot, but obviously, that doesn't really matter much. I'm an MCR fan, so you've gained points before I've even started reading, haha!

First thing I noticed (unfortunately) was a grammar mistake. Where you write "grown too look like Jaydee", it should read "grown to look like Jaydee". The too/to thing annoys me slightly, so sorry for pointing it out, but I really needed to. Another thing I noticed, and I'm not sure if this is just a formatting error, there are a few lines that seem to be...split in the first chapter. I saw two examples as I was reading through.

I was totally not expecting the Mikey twist, so I really loved that! This is an idea I've seen a few times before, but the way you write it is so interesting, and I like that you're doing it in a way that others haven't. I really think you've got a good story going on here. Keep doing what you're doing, you really do have a unique way of writing! :)

Okay, I clicked on I Never Told You What I Did For A Living at random, and went through everything you have posted for this story within an hour! So yes, this is amazing, and I must have more immediately. Please and thank you?

Although, I have to say, I miss Gerard and Jaydee and all of their craziness...*pouts*

This story is pretty wonderful. I really enjoy it. You're writing style is pretty unique which i totally respect. I cant wait to read more of your work. :) Keep writing because you have a lot of talent. the first chapter is chilling, its hard to get that much emotion and power into writing but good job

Just read it all in one go for the first time .... LOVE <3

I was beginning to feel that you abandon me :(
I'm just joking, I understand how much our personal lives conflict; most times real life is more important
Anyway, I loved this update, I can't wait to read what'll happen next!

LOOOOOOOOVED IT!

I'm happy to see your back!
Okay, I'm kinda glad Petton found Donna, but I'm afraid of what Frank will say to her when or if he finds out. I'm so excited for the next update.

Please write more!! I just love this story and I'm always dissapointed when I don't get an email saying it's been updated. D': I can't wait to see what you come up with next! :D

I cant wait for more!!
Sooo excited! <333

Gaaahhh I wanna know moree!!! Ah-mazing. :D
Aw man, the next chapter is gonna be epic. I honestly don't want her to get hurt, but she has to find out one day, right? Well, that chapter pretty much made my night.
Update soon please please pleaaaseee!!! :D

Shes getting the grandparents! I can't wait to see how she reacts!

YES!! I can't wait to read the next chapter!!! I hope Frank tells Peyton about Mikey. She deserves to know. Update soon please!!! :D

Loooove looove loved it!!!

Amazing...... I wonder how she is going to react when/if they tell her.(: I lovers it!! <3 Update soon!!!..... and thats a demand.(:
^_^ Love love love it all!!!