June 19th, 2012 at 02:33am
Error in summary. Think you meant taken instead of takewn. Weeks has an extra e too. The layout is a bit of an eyesore, but that just maybe me. I think the plot is a bit out of the box, which is good. You just have some extra letters within words. (Like Shoe instead of She?)Maybe you should read over it before posting so everything is alright.
"Take me. Make me yours." She shouted at him, as he punded into her.
Comma after yours should be there. :) All in all it's nice, just have to work on minor things.
I like this a lot. The layout is awesome.
You make some rad stories and layouts.
All in all awesome as always. XP