Forget - Comments

First off. I am really digging the layout, it's very nice and isn't too much.

The summary is very interesting, and I can't wait to see where it actually takes me.

You lie, not a good smut writer. LIE. That chapter is really, really good! You didn't detail every little thing, it wasn't over done, and it was... yeah next chapter, shall we?

I would have fainted too if I found out I was pregnant.

I really do hope you continue this, it is so very good!

interesting start! i can't wait for more! XD

This is a very interesting story and the summary itself is extremely interesting. With that being said, comment swap brought be here and I am not really a fan of any type of book addons or anything like that...i guess i like the stories as I read them ahahaha! however, you are a very good smut writer as others have also commented, it is very good and instantly caught my attention! Great job, keep it up. I would definitely continue on with this story!

Despite your comment at the end, I think you are a very good smut writer. :)

You bring more of a passionate point of view into the smut, rather than just the nitty-gritty (which you brought some of that too). I like the italicizing you did. It added another part to the story, the part in which the main character is thinking. The layout is lovely and the font is easy to read.

Like the comment above, I agree that this story has potential already. The plot always thickens as the story goes on and I can't wait to see where this will go with Tom, hahah! :)

Also, the smut wasn't as bad as I suspected. Some people really get into it, but for a first chapter, what you wrote was acceptable. Really good job with vocabulary, too!

You should keep going with the story :)

AH, first to comment!!

I actually don't normally read smut, but I don't mind this one. If anything, I think it's more on a "classy" side of smut. It was well written, well structured and I was able to follow the chain of action fluidly---you definitely went away from the standard all-smut-no-structure writing, which was great.
It was sexual, clearly, but it was never excessively vulgar, and I think I appreciate that even more.

Spelling was great, and so was your grammar: BONUS.
I also like how you wrote this chapter; it completely seemed like an act that was caught up in the moment. I would imagine this is realistic in that nature, but hey, what do I know? XD

Overall great job! I think it has potential. Keep it up!