Stay Still - Comments

I thought this was beautifully written and I really liked it, I think you could go really far with a writing career and I do hope you carry on writing. The ending was really good, and I liked every character and thought you captured peoples Characteristics and personalities well

Aw, wow. That was incredibly heartbreaking, but beautifully written.

The only thing that bothered me was the girl's calmness when she woke in a hospital without any recollection of how she got there. I can't imagine anyone handling that as easily as she did, but I'm thinking perhaps that was some part of her character? She seemed like a pretty laid-back person to begin with.

Very nice, love.

This bittersweet in a way, and I quite enjoyed it. Though it is straight to the point, which if fine, I wish there was more description. But that doesn't really matter for a one shot I guess. Glad the girl didn't die because I could just imagine her bf to go crazy.
Lovely story :)

I liked this story. I thought she was going to die but in the end she didn't. I suggest fixing your layout though. With the picture moving at all. I personally don't like it and I found it a bit hard to read. But it's ok, the story was still well written and I enjoyed the tale very much.

I loved this. It was one of those stories where you just know that the girl is going to die then a twist where she is alive. I liked it a lot. It was well written. <3