March 30th, 2012 at 01:18am
This was amazing The words you chose to use. The metaphors. I absolutely loved the first line, 'I am a storm'. It hooked people, and then your wonderful writing kept people entertained through the whole ordeal. Though I can't help but wonder what the guy did wrong. I think a little more background on your character would have been amazing, but it was okay without it.
I'm not too sure on the picture that you used for the banner. I like it, and it isn't so off what you wonder why in the hell she chose it. But it could have been better. Also, I kind of skipped over the title because blends so well with the story content background.
Very very good, I really like your writing style and the way you slyly incorporated the lyrics to the song in there was impressive. Genuinely enjoyed this, I'm going to go and check out the rest of your stuff.
I think you should write one about 'A Demon's Fate' by the way, would be a good story :D
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