Our Love Story - Comments

you asked me to read it... and its pretty good, but its almost as if it was a list... when you write a story you want to draw things out to more than what they are because you want to paint me a picture of what happened. I mean when did he say I love you? the first day they met at the beach? it was the slightest bit confusing in the beginning... don't give me a list of: we went to the beach, we ate ice cream, we kissed, he said I love you, he left, I left, he came back and asked me to marry him.... draw it out and explain it more is my suggestion to you... the story was cute though... a little unrealistic, but very cute!

Also don't think I didn't like it... but you asked me to read it, and I did and I'm trying to give you constructive criticism... What I told you is something I struggle with as well... also you are a better writer than I ever was when I wrote as much as you have, so no worries I know you will get better and become an AMAZING writer one day, a GAZILLION times better than me!

Awww this is soo cute!!!

Awww it's so cuteeeeee! x)

Ummm. Well I want to say something bad about it because I'm mad at you but... *Sigh* All I can think of is that they've been married for 20 years. I really don't see how they managed that one. That' 2 decades. WOW. I still hate you by the way.

You need to learn how to spell exist. "Igist" is not a word. Also, show not tell and go back and have someone edit your writing. You can send it, if you want, to my account for me to edit it. Your writing is juvenile. Also oneshot does not have a hyphen intercepting it. It's one word.

this is ssoo cute!!! (:

so cute you should take requests if u do i call getting the first one!!!!!!!!!! lol

The part where she opens the door and finds him already down on one knee made me smile. <3 Good job!