I have to start out by saying that I was really intrigued by the concept behind this. Unfortunately, I don't come across enough stories on Meebz with a darker tone, but it's always refreshing when I do :)
I really liked how the story began right-smack-dab in the middle of the action, and I also enjoyed Frank's internal monologue. I do have the say that the red-font-on-black is a little difficult for me to read.
The only concrit I really have is that I would love to have read more description. I don't know who Frank is, and there isn't really enough description for me to visualize him in my head. Of course, I don't mean paragraphs upon paragraphs of nothing but physical description, but as a reader not familiar with the fandom, it is a little difficult to get into, so some physical attributes woven in here and there wouldn't hurt.
I really liked how the story began right-smack-dab in the middle of the action, and I also enjoyed Frank's internal monologue. I do have the say that the red-font-on-black is a little difficult for me to read.
The only concrit I really have is that I would love to have read more description. I don't know who Frank is, and there isn't really enough description for me to visualize him in my head. Of course, I don't mean paragraphs upon paragraphs of nothing but physical description, but as a reader not familiar with the fandom, it is a little difficult to get into, so some physical attributes woven in here and there wouldn't hurt.