I Could Be Right Here Empty With You - Comments

Ah! The frustration! They need to seriously get together or I'll go insane! I love this though<3

I love this <3 please update soon :)
Frank and Gee really need to talk about their feelings

Argh I'm so happy you updated like wow that took forever!

Anyways, keep writing! <3

Love it <3 please update soon :)
You should make Gerard and Frankie admit their feelings :3

But thanks for commenting anyway, I appreciate the advice.

About the format of dialogue, I'm not really sure what you mean, because I've used speech marks, and correct punctuation and now it's all paragraphed correctly I don't see any problems.

Better now? I fixed the dialogue and paragraphs because I found out that Mibba doesn't let you indent for proper paragraphs, so I had to use lines instead. Also, I changed the font colour, so you should be able to read it a little easier now, although I don't think anybody else had a problem with the colours (though i couldn't read it on my phone due to the dark screen so I do see where you're coming from).

Thanks for the comments! I can read it perfectly fine but surr I will change the background. Also, Im not sure what you mean by the dialogue isnt formatted properly.. Down a line and indented with the tab bar is how it is supposed to be, there arent really supposed to be lines between. And as for paragraphs, unlike most mibba stories my paragraphs arent two lines long, and I set the paragraphs out properly with just an indent at the beginning. There isnt suppised to be a line between paragraphs. You never see lines between paragraphs in books, and I got an A* in all of my gcse english coursework with paragraphs set out like this. However I will go through and edit some of the dialogue and how it is set out because I know there are probably some mistakes there. no need to be so patronising about it btw, im not stupid. All these other people seem to have read the story just fine.

LOL Gerard is such a drama queen XD maybe he should wait for Mikey to explain, but that was still funny, he was playing a over protective boyfriend, though he's not Frank's boyfriend! :D LOL again C: I believe Mikey that it was just a drunken mistake C: and love Frank for pushing him away C: now Mikey's girlfriend needs to come and they'll have loud sex and Frank wouldn't want to hear it, so he'd move in with Gerard LOL idk XD

Haven't read any Frerards in a while so thought I'd give it a go, however, I didn't get far.

The storyline itself sounds interesting enough, but a few things hinder me from even reading this.
First of all the layout. The text is too dark for the background it's on; it's impossible to read. I had to click "default layout". Secondly you're not properly paragraphing the text, which makes it hard to read. Everything's just a huge chunk and you're not making new paragraphs for dialog either. Thirdly your dialog isn't properly formatted.

I'm sure this is a cute story, but these things (which do actually break Mibba's official rules for stories) makes it hard to tell.

haha :p you know sometimes i read back through my work and then im like wtf XD this was one of those times.

OMG that was so genius C: and Gee was so relaxed about it O.o but it was awesome C:

Hahahaha it was really kinky C: spanking isn't just harmless flirting anymore C: still loved it :D it was so funny C: and I like this flirting so C: stick to your plan C:

Yeah, sounds like a good idea! I'll try and write something interesting in. Thanks for the suggestions :)

It would be quite funny to see something to happen between mikey and frank when theyre at mikeys and gerard to find out about it so he gets angry lol :)

lol chapter twelve was so funny :L

thank you guys!! xox

Very Good, i like this one. A lot. Keep it coming x

okay, me agrees C: ah flirtly Frankie, very flirty C: and Gee too, it's so cute now when they are flirting and are so clueless :3

I'm glad that my story is atleast a little emotional! this is my first proper story that I've got feedback on so I'm glad you guys like it.

:D thanks for commenting