Should've Said Yes - Comments

I like how this one is so short, but you're still able to get your point across how you want it. There weren't any large gaps in the plot because it was so short, which is uncommon when people write short stories like this; generally, people rush through trying to make it short and leave a bunch of shit out.

I feel like I was really inside the character's head while reading this. I completely understood what she was going through, even though I've never been in her shoes. And that's amazing!

Although this is short it says so much. The sense of regret was so prominent, but I like the fact that she's still somewhat content with her decision when she says 'I just couldn't be that girl.' I really enjoyed this.

Wow, really beautiful. Fantastic job!

I really loved this. :)

The beginning of this is nice and strong, the questions flow like a natural thought process.
The repetition of “Damn it …” adds to the sense of regret and makes the reader sympathise with the narrator, it’s a nice effect.
The contrast between the happy memories and the “But I’ve lost him now” is sharp and adds to the drama of the story.
“They wouldn’t have understood.” Adds to the obvious loneliness that the narrator feels and makes you want to give the girl a big hug.
“I lost him and I’ve never been the same.” is such a loaded sentence. It implies how incomplete everything feels when you lose the one you love and how you feel as though you will never recover.
I think this is a very good story; it’s powerful in a thought provoking way and reads in a very natural way.