Writers and the Muse - Comments

Comment swap brought me here. I really do like the idea of this story. I've never really heard of anything similar to this storyline before, and the uniqueness really interested me. However, there were a few moments of confusion for me in this story. At some points, it almost felt you were just trying to throw these impressive synonyms into the story where they didn't really have a place. It's good that you want to improve on word usage, but just make sure it flows nicely. Other than that, great job!

Hello, from comment swap

Firstly, I didn't understand your title. Yes, it was unique and creative, but lacked substance, meaning, didn't bring thought that matched yor summary, which was too short, and not intriguing enough. Your chapters are very confusing, I would understand it better if the title or summary explained a journey, or indicated time. Then the countdown of the chapters would make sense. Did they even count down, I can't remember, but a reader shouldn't have to be confused about something as simple as chapters.

Secondly, there lacked significant imagery. Many people understand and are aware of events that happen in the library. Saying it was partially dead, gives the readers enough to imagine it themselves, therefore not needing the rest of the imagery because it's self explanatory.

The character's profile was semi- easy to understand, and I enjoyed the traits where she believes she could hide in the stories, but there needs to be an indication as to why, what started it. Depression, and lack of identity is very good but it wasn't portrayed very well in the content.

The descriptions need more body. Don't explain the things that are common in the world, describe the things readers won't understand. Why she is there, what drew her in to the library. Why are books the only thing that allows her to disappear? You do answer these questions however I felt they weren't described as well as it could've been. If third person, use it in the way such that you can show us, the readers, and leave the protagonist oblivious.

This is a very good story, it just really needs work. If you write at the bottom of your summary that you know the story doesn't make sense and it needs work, don't post it. Unless there are specific questions you want critiques to answer.

Comment swap brought me to this and the title piqued my interest. I really like the storyline of this; it's unique and I'm left wanting to read more and see what happens. I will admit that there are some errors and a couple places where it doesn't flow quite right, but it's still perfectly readable and easy to follow. You have really good descriptions and a great plot. Keep writing :)

Comment swap reader here. Firstly, I really like the title of the story. The beginning is good, but a little confusing…did Mibba eat the chapters? It went from chapter 1 to chapter 25..either that my internet is on the fritz. Anyhow with hat I did read, it is really well written!

The story is really well written. I really like how you describe things in detail. i think that the story could became something really good. So as to give this story a try i'm subscribing. ~Subscribed

Only read the first one [ch. 21] but I'm liking it =]