So maybe she's not so crazy after all... I mean if Captain Oblivious likes her in that way... LOL I really like what you're doing with this, keep it up.
I have absolutely no idea who Sidney Crosby is, and I don't really follow hockey, but your story is interesting and informative. I'll definitely be reading the whole story just now that I've read the first chapter, I can't bear to not finish the rest.
I'm a stickler for correct spelling and correct grammar, so that's another reason as to why I'm finishing the story!
I am not a fan of hockey. With that said, I loved the story. Your descriptions are excellent. Your main character has an engaging, cutesy feel about her that I find very appealing. Your grammar and spelling were notably polished although I'd suggest considering a few of your word choices. For example, there were a couple instances were you wrote 'did' when 'made' would have sounded better, and things like that. But that's me really being a nitpick. For the most part, I liked this. I don't even like hockey, but I found the story to be interesting and amusing all the same.
okay, so. i read the first chapter and suprisingly liked it. i'm not a gigantic fan of hockey but Crosby is just so stunning, and well, sexy- you know. and I'd read anything with him in it. i liked how she was all cute like, "excuse me while i drool all over you during practice cause you're a god, and-"
yeah, like i said. sexyness.
i'm going to go back and read the rest of the chapters 'cause i'm curious as to what happens next (: