They Really Just Want to Have Sex With You - Comments

comment swap;
Firstly, when I saw the title of the story I wasn't going to read it. Hah, I was going to refuse and say fuck it. (Scuse my French), but I clicked on it anyway. This isn't as horrid as I was expecting. I would space out the paragraphs every time someone speaks, but the story itself is actually really interesting. Good job! :)

Hey (: You've got some really awesome bands in this, and I love the concept. But I think some of the grammar could be improved; like putting more commas in. And if you spaced it out into paragraphs, because it's a little hard to read in one block, and maybe you could add more of a background to Kaden and the characters relationships? Other than that, I really like it :D

Hey im a comment swapper :) I love The Maine and i enjoyed the first chapter of your story, the only thing i would have liked would of been to have more of a background of Kaden as i felt like i had started a story somewhere in the middle. Other than that i really enjoyed your story so far :)