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Fantastic update. Wonderfully written. I'm excited to see where you end up taking it (or hopefully taking it). :)

I can't tell you how much your words mean to me. It brings me back to a horrible place in my life, but it doesn't hurt. This is beautiful.

I don't really understand completely what's going on, but I like trying to figure out through your abstract writing. It's not like anything I've ever read befoare and that is a good thing, so congrats! :)

that was amazing. i love how short and sweet the chapters were, and you pulled off the rare, second-person perspective very well.

though i didn't quite understand what was going on, i loved the abstractness of the first chapter; it's got this air of mystery about it that makes you want more.

and i absolutely loved the second chapter, because the imagery and metaphors were so beautiful. i can especially relate to what the narrating character's saying. i understand hating the world and jumping off the bridge because of it, but i can't imagine myself wanting to fly simply because i don't want to be what i am, and so i agree; the other character sounds so unique, so special.

i see that you wrote the second chapter about a month ago, so i really hope that you don't abandon this story. it's just lovely so far. i think this definitely deserves more attention than it's getting.

(by the way, i was going through your stories and found that i've actually read one of them before - delirium - though i think i read it when it was still called 'lunacy', before you rewrote it. and when i was going through my old stuff, i also discovered that we've talked for a bit through profile comments before, hahah. so hi.)

Quirky :3 I really liked it. I agree with the comments below, as well.

This was the perfect example of how a short piece of writing can still be very telling and enjoyable to read. I liked your use of description, it makes it easy to be sucked into the story. Great job =]

I really like your writing style and imagery. I mean it's really good so far. But I will tell you: I really like abstract things, but most abstract things don't have solid plots, which annoys the hell out of me. Make sure you don't distract too much from your plot! It's really wonderful so far. Keep going!