Casual Sex - Comments

*Tips hat to you*
For your first ever one-shot, this is so good.
Hot sex is hot.
But Matty, what are you doing? Don't be that guy, don't just have your way with Brian and then go back to your wife. No, not happening, not on my watch. Okay, I'm rambling, I just woke up XD
But I love it. <3

Only shiz!! I love the whole Matt/Brian slash. I absolutely loved this one shot. Although the end made me a little sad. I can't believe Matt would just turn his back on Brian like that.

There were a few errors like "lukewarm water his his skin." I'm pretty sure you meant hit his. But it's ok. This was just astonishing. I love it.

I've read various slashes about Matt and Brian, but this one is definitely at the top of my list. Keep writing.

I'm a huge avenged sevenfold, I've seen them play many, many times & I've met them many times as well. Everytime I read something like this about them right before their concert, I can only think of them as the character in the story!! Hahaha thank goodness I wont be seeing them for awhile . I'm more of a Zacky fan, but Brian comes to a close second :)
Overall, you're a great writer! This one shot is def different than the ones I usually read, but I loved it none the less. Obviously, the ending was like aww poor Bri, but it wouldn't have been soo amazing if it didn't end that way! I say, sequal :)

Wooo, comment swap is directing me to a variety of stories today it seems. Which is good as I do like a diverse style. The imagery is stunning, as not most writers tend to bother with description or adjectives for that matter. So your writing made it easier to follow and picture in my head. I'm never a fan of not happy endings, but for this one it fit. Good job :)

oh, avenged sevenfold! comment swap has been taking me everywhere today! i lvoe how it's honest, just fucking, but they're still quite loving about it all. and then matt, the adulterer! i can't imagine how betrayed brian must feel, that's terrible. why does brian let matt use him like that? brian's better than that, goddamnit. and then the scene where they confront, ugh, matt needs to stop. i love how this is your second language, but it flows more fluidly than most people who has english as their first! brilliant work!

This was very well written compared to other oneshots I have read. I am a huge fan of slash stories and this one is up there with my top favorites. You have a lot of skill with your writing and this has little to no grammar errors.

As a oneshot I feel this was well written. In my opinion, how certain things were worded made me reread it once or twice; but every writer has their own style.
Normally I don't read or write slash stories, but again it was an overall well written piece of work; especially with English being your second language as well as being 16.
Other than those few things, keep up the good work.

I yelled at the screen when I read that ending, okay.
I LOVED IT! It's great, really. And I love this kind of stories, even tho I hate when there's no fluffy happy ending because I end feeling bad for, in this case, Brian; it makes it more realistic. Anyway, I won't start babbling about it. The thing is that I really really loved it.
And I wouldn't mind a sequel... ;)

I never would have guessed that English was your second language! This is wonderful. I loved it. I feel really bad for Brian, and really would just love to punch Matt in the face for his behavior. But great job! I really enjoyed it. <3 I agree with everyone else. There should definitely be a sequel to it. Wonderful!

For English being your second language, you write BETTER than half the writers out there who's first language is English, so great freaking job!!
I love this so much and from the little bits you sent me in messages, I knew it was going to be epic(and sad) and it was!
I feel really bad for Brian
He just gets disregarded by Matt and used and that makes me sad.
Come on Matt, stop being mean :(
I agree with everyone else, you should most definitely write a sequel to this :D
Amazing job my friend, AMAZING!!!!

It's really good, when English is yoru second language (because it's actually better than mine :b).
Anyway I really think you should make a sequel to it :D

Well, never knew your english was that good.
You're awesome. Please go on writing .___.
I love it.
Um .. After reading this .. I wish i had a penis :D
And just to inform you, Matt is an asshole -.-

For English being your second language, this is very well written! I really enjoyed reading it. :) I agree with Amanishi Vengeance in that you could definitely explore more with Matt's real feelings, like the reason he's so cold is because he loves him and he doesn't want to. But yeah, great job, I really liked it!

I love this. I'm not an expert in grammar and English is my second language so I think your English is not bad. I like that your writing style is simple and easy to understand.

I feel sorry for Brian. I have this nagging feeling at the back of my head that Matt actually does love Brian back but he doesn't want to hurt Val any more than he already did. That's why he's being so cold and distant to Brian. Poor boys.

Maybe you can write a sequel for this story, making it in Matt's POV. ^_^

Anyway, this is an amazing story!