February 27th, 2013 at 06:21pm
Hi there,
I'm Belle and I found this story when you mentioned it in Teethmarks.
I'm really interested to see what happens next.
Payton seems like a really interesting character.
I spot one mistake, near the end though.
"He doesn't work? He could you afford the move?"
I'm not sure what you were trying to say, maybe "How could you afford the move?"
Can't wait to read you next update! You have a new subscriber. :D
It's good.