February 13th, 2014 at 10:11pm
I just love your writing style, it's so organized and descriptive and reading it I feel almost as bad for Carrie as she feels herself.
Even though it had nothing to do with the band this is probably one of my favorite chapters so far; just seeing a little glimpse into Carrie's life and her relationship with her father was lovely.
I can't wait for more!
I've always been a sucker for stories that just throw you right into the thick of it, so having the story start off with the phone is a really good call (hahahaa I'm so not funny) because it does throw the reader right into the story and gets everything off to a flying start. I read through that whole section expecting a phone call and I must admit, I did giggle a little when it was the doorbell and not the phone that rang. And then when Carrie receives the phone call in the second chapter...I don't know, I don't understand why I find that so amusing. Maybe it's ironic, I don't know but it's a nice way of tying the characters together as well. I was honestly terrified when they all came up with the show him what he's losing plan though because that almost always ends in disaster. It works, but it leaves massive tatters behind and causes so much drama. I was looking forward to the drama ensuing from the very second I read that line. And then the whole Stix / Jo thing came about and wedding planners and oh my. I don't think that was the best decision but I can see something good coming out of it all so hopefully I'm wrong about everything ending in chaos!
The thing that I love the most about this story is how three-dimensional all of the characters are. Carrie has this wonderfully sarcastic view on everything and she seems like the type of person that I'd love to hang out with, but she's got this really unprofessional and rash side to her personality that I'm totally digging, especially when I keep reading through. My heart really broke for her when she got the call from Satch about his marriage because it just seems like she just can't catch a break. And Jo has this really lovely motherly attitude to everything, but she also blames herself for things that she probably shouldn't. It really is the concept of the fatal flaw personified within the characters and it makes for a really good read throughout.
Honestly, I think the thing that amuses me the most about this entire thing is that my group of friends is pretty much exactly like this and I can relate to it so much. I'll definitely be subscribing to this to see where it goes. Great job so far!