Time to Dance - Comments

Arrival from comment swap.

As I was reading I noticed you use a LOT of periods, most of those are definitely not required. I also notriced some grammar stuff like this: "I smiled and got out of my sit" I think you mean Seat instead. Mostly though I loved this good job.

So comment swap sent me here. I like the idea. It seems a bit choppy. Combining some of your sentences will help fix this. In your dialogue; unless it’s a question or it ends with an exclamation point it needs to have a comma between the last word of what the character is saying and right before the closing quotation mark. Also if I understand correctly you are using those dashes (-----) to show a time elapse, it would be better if you used words instead. It helps the story flow better. Other than that good job! :D

Hellooo, I've come here via comment swap.
First off, I love Panic at the disco so this was great. It's quite an easy read, save for a few grammar and spelling mistakes. Other than that, I found myself really liking this story since it's relatable and not that hard to understand. I like your simple writing style and encourage you to keep on with it. Much love and good luck.

-Jess xx

I think the story is great!