Indecently Decent - Comments

This was interesting... I didnt even know it was a Waycest until the end, which was a shock for me... I liked it :)

I think I'm deleting this shizz. :3

I love it(: It was 'mazing. :D ;)

I really liked it, although try spacing out the paragraphs more. :D

This is very very good
As said before, all you need to do was space out the paragraphs, is all.

Lol, ok a lot of people have already given constructive criticism, but I'll still give the same stuff.

It's a lot easier to read when a story is in paragraphs and not all bunched together. You should space your paragraphs just as how I am doing in this comment.

Secondly, your dialogue needs some work. You should start dialogue on a new line and double spaced as the paragraphs are (to see what I mean, look at one of the chapters in my story and see how the dialogue is spaced). Also, when a different person speaks, put them in a new line. Don't put two peoples' dialogue in the same sentence.

But never the less, this story was pretty good for your first attempt. I didn't see anything drastically wrong with your punctuation or spelling, so it's all good :D Just fix up what I've told you to, and you shouldn't get any evil messages from story editors telling you that they're suspended your story :D

it's nice! i like it. i'm a sucker for anything that has to do with the way bros and/or frank. :D

and ditto about the paragraph thing. other than that (and that it was too short; the only thing i hate about one shots):

THUMBS UP! woot!

That's what I was kinda hoping for. =] But I put Waycest in there somwhere, didn't I? I didn't wanna ruin it, but I felt I kinda had too. =] I'm glad you liked it!

whoa! I thought it was Frank or someone. Damn women! Your a good writer! this shouldn't be a one shot this should be a story!

One thing though is that-well two- space your paragraphs, like they said early and make sure that every time someone talk, double space that to!

Keep writing!

M'kay. I'll definitely work on it. :] I'm glad you gave it a chance to, Court. Heh.

I agree with Panic! Attack about the spacing in between paragraphs, you might want to do that after dialogue too. Just a suggestion.
I liked it.
:D

I'm so glad you liked it! =]
M'kay, I'll keep that in mind for the next time [hopefully!] I write something. =]

For your first story, (well, actually, your first shot),
it was really good. I'm not that big on Waycest,
but this was nicely writen! =]

The one thing that I would do (if I were you) is
space out the paragraphs a little more, just to
make it easier on the eyes.

Other than that, it was just fantastic!