Astronomy 101 - Comments

I really enjoyed this. And how the narrator noticed the little things about her. It was cute. :)

To be honest, I smiled the entire time reading this. It touched my heart how innocent the narrator's love - I think that's what he's feeling - for the girl is. He takes note of the little things she does; things that other people, herself included, might not even give a second thought about. The ending made me go aw. The girl didn't tease him for being unable to form proper sentences and nor did she think that she was out of his league. She understood what the boy wanted to know and gave it to him without question. It makes me wonder if she, too, is intrigued by him and had been for the same length of time or maybe even before he noticed her. I also like the fact that no names are mentioned, except for the professor's. It prevents me from getting distracted from side characters. That aside, let's move on to the composition. Like I said before in Beautiful, you did a really good job. Sentence structure, adjectives, content; I'd give them all a thumbs up. There are just two things I'd like to talk about, both are my personal preferences so it's really up to you if you follow them out or not. First, I like to separate new paragraphs with a space. I see you do this already but there are two or three that you missed. Second, I like to put a space after an ellipse. With that said, that's all I have to comment on for this drabble. I hope this comment helped. I look forward to more of your future works!